Here is the link to Google Docs to read my extended essay.
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About Me
- Meagan Floyd
- Louisville, Kentucky
- I'm Meagan. And Maverick is my sock monkey. These are the tales of our adventures and activities in Louisville and the world.
This piece is solid with a impecable foundation to rely on. Watch out for some sentences that aren't complete or have unnecessary words. Your vocabulary is excellent and ties the different sources with what you are trying to tell the reader. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI like how the piece begins with a quote to get your attention and then keeps it by predicting the future. Your outside source is very interesting. Your paper stays on topic while not getting boring. The beginning and end are comprised of short sentences which will keep the millennial generation on track. Also, very nice job connecting the beginning and end.
ReplyDeleteProject: Convince me that technology isn't evil (easy to do since I agree)
ReplyDeleteMethods: Excellent presentation of things that have already happened and the proof that they aren't bad (technology in the classroom)
Materials: Numerous sources, a few of which I have not heard of
Keywords: "Millennial generation" really got my attention, your statistics on the time we spend reading versus time we spend on the internet stuck with me.
Limitations: You have a very persuasive way of writing to those who may be on the fence, but to those who are stuck on their opinion you may not appeal enough to their opinion to get them hooked into your writing.
EXCELLENT PIECE!!!
Project: Reveal the intense benefits of technology and show me why it is better.
ReplyDeleteMethods: Show me your side of the opinion and give evidence of what you are talking about.
Materials: Your paper that I respect very much with its sources.
Keywords: “affecting” was a significant word, even though it was at the end it signifies how important technology is to our generation.
Limitations: There are no limitations in my opinion, it is a matter of who your audience is and how they react to it.